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01-28-2010, 06:42 PM
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My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
I thought it was worth sharing.
Tear drops on the cold steel of his gun, The wind stings his face he is done, He can do no more His heart is broken, But a demon inside he feels he has awoken, His ears still ring with the last shots fired, his whole body is tired, most of his friends dead, there screams still sound in his head, Even though all is silent all he can feel is violence and anger, His government came but the people won, Another civil war is over and done, But he crys in duisgust at what his country had become, but tyrants were again overcome, All he has now is his faith and his gun, not even his family can be there to see all that has been done, Now he must start over, be reborn, He looks at the faint light of dawn, Holds his rifle tight, and smiles at the suns new light, He starts to walk not knowing were he is going, just walking hoping to find new life, just walking hoping not to meet the angel with the scythe. |
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01-28-2010, 07:23 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Quite sobering poem, tell your son well done
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01-28-2010, 08:10 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Obviously he is not in public school, or that would have gotten him expelled.
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01-28-2010, 08:48 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Tear drops on the cold steel of his gun,
The wind stings his face he is done, He can do no more His heart is broken, But a demon inside he feels he has awoken, His ears still ring with the last shots fired, his whole body is tired, most of his friends dead, there screams still sound in his head, Even though all is silent all he can feel is violence and anger, His government came but the people won, Another civil war is over and done, But he crys in duisgust at what his country had become, but tyrants were again overcome, All he has now is his faith and his gun, not even his family can be there to see all that has been done, Now he must start over, be reborn, He looks at the faint light of dawn, Holds his rifle tight, and smiles at the suns new light, He starts to walk not knowing were he is going, just walking hoping to find new life, just walking hoping not to meet the angel with the scythe. ------------------------------------------------------------ Sir may i suggest you send this with your son's details to this site http://www.poetpatriot.com/ i know Mr Hancock would be most interested, and i for one will be happy to nominate it for publication Well done to your son! pity some cannot see the possibilities and risks ahead as well as some kids again well done to your young one and well done to you thank you for posting this jack |
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01-28-2010, 09:58 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
If this kid lives in Mass. or California the swat team is probably being called and the Secret Service are knocking on the door.
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01-29-2010, 10:00 AM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Just curious what grade did he receive on it?
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01-29-2010, 11:42 AM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Wow.
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01-29-2010, 12:12 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Very well put together poem. Your son could get something of a compilation together if he likes to write things like that and have them published.
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01-29-2010, 12:38 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
We live in R.I. and he is 17 ant got a 98 on it. He also says thank you for the compliments.
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01-30-2010, 06:45 AM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Very well done.
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01-30-2010, 03:29 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Well done. The young man has talent.
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02-05-2010, 05:00 AM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Well done. With feeling that belies his age.
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02-05-2010, 01:06 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Well done! I sent this to a friend who likes to write poetry. He also served in the military.
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02-05-2010, 03:44 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
That was awesome - very talented your son.
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02-05-2010, 11:48 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Awesome poem!!!!!!!
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02-05-2010, 11:51 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Im 17 an i gotta say that was a awesome poem i live in cali so if i wrote that (an i cant that was way above my skills) id b suspended lol
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02-06-2010, 05:04 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
BRAVO!!
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02-07-2010, 12:20 AM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
Nice.
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02-09-2010, 09:03 PM
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Re: My son wrote this poem for his writing class.
I am proud of him for it, But im surprised there wasnt any real issues with any teachers
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