2nd amendment paper is finished - The Firearms Forum

zkovach · 11-11-2010, 05:08 PM

Thanks again for your guys help. The bulk of the paper is finished i just have to cite referances and proof read. The websites you gave me were awesome and made writing the paper easy. I even learned a thing or two. By request the Paper is attached. again i am still revising.

Thanks!
Z

hogger129 · 11-11-2010, 06:32 PM

I thought it was a very good paper.

Bobitis · 11-11-2010, 07:16 PM

Are you open to critisism Z?

1st of all, I've never found a reliable source to Yamamoto's quote about 'every blade'. While it's a noble idea, You'll need to site a reputable source.

Don't call 'em guns. They're 'firearms'. 'Guns' sounds redneck (not that that's a bad thing). You're not getting any points for that. Handgun is ok, as is shotgun. If you're referring to firearms in 'general', use firearm as the descriptive term.

I won't critique your entire paper, but please check your punctuation.
Read, read, read... and correct.

It makes a HUGE difference in your presentation.

zkovach · 11-11-2010, 07:53 PM

i saw that yamamotos quote is in question so i may change it to read weather he said it or not to accept the premise. i havent proof read it quite yet but i will. i was interested to see what you guys thought overall. i also used firearms and guns together so i wasnt always repeating one term.

Bobitis · 11-11-2010, 08:11 PM

Z, be aware that you will be critiqued on your usage as well as your repetitions of verbiage.

Try to shorten your arguements and cut out the excess/repepitive stuff.

Keep reading and rereading. You are your best author. Try to filter out the fluff, and focus on the original arguement.

Be succint in your presentation. Present your point with adequate backup and don't let your emotions get in the way.

Lack of logic is the mind killer. Be composed. Be positive. Be correct. Be sure of your sources. Try to write clearly while seeming to be neutral. I know it's tough, but I have the feeling you will do well.

Good luck.

Jeff Midguard · 11-12-2010, 08:48 AM

Pretty good paper. Prepare to be heavily critiqued.

sewerman · 11-13-2010, 04:29 PM

very good job

sewerman

11-11-2010, 06:32 PM	#2
hogger129 Advanced Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2009 Posts: 4,064	Re: 2nd amendment paper is finished I thought it was a very good paper. Last edited by hogger129; 11-11-2010 at 06:34 PM..

11-11-2010, 07:16 PM	#3
Bobitis Advanced Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 6,612	Re: 2nd amendment paper is finished Are you open to critisism Z? 1st of all, I've never found a reliable source to Yamamoto's quote about 'every blade'. While it's a noble idea, You'll need to site a reputable source. Don't call 'em guns. They're 'firearms'. 'Guns' sounds redneck (not that that's a bad thing). You're not getting any points for that. Handgun is ok, as is shotgun. If you're referring to firearms in 'general', use firearm as the descriptive term. I won't critique your entire paper, but please check your punctuation. Read, read, read... and correct. It makes a HUGE difference in your presentation. __________________ ^.^ A point in every direction is the same as having no point at all

11-11-2010, 07:53 PM	#4
zkovach Advanced Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: Michigan Posts: 1,005	Re: 2nd amendment paper is finished i saw that yamamotos quote is in question so i may change it to read weather he said it or not to accept the premise. i havent proof read it quite yet but i will. i was interested to see what you guys thought overall. i also used firearms and guns together so i wasnt always repeating one term. __________________ Liberalism: Poverty for ALL!!

11-11-2010, 08:11 PM	#5
Bobitis Advanced Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 6,612	Re: 2nd amendment paper is finished Z, be aware that you will be critiqued on your usage as well as your repetitions of verbiage. Try to shorten your arguements and cut out the excess/repepitive stuff. Keep reading and rereading. You are your best author. Try to filter out the fluff, and focus on the original arguement. Be succint in your presentation. Present your point with adequate backup and don't let your emotions get in the way. Lack of logic is the mind killer. Be composed. Be positive. Be correct. Be sure of your sources. Try to write clearly while seeming to be neutral. I know it's tough, but I have the feeling you will do well. Good luck. __________________ ^.^ A point in every direction is the same as having no point at all

11-12-2010, 08:48 AM	#6
Jeff Midguard V.I.P. Member Join Date: Aug 2010 Location: Baja Arizona Posts: 233	Re: 2nd amendment paper is finished Pretty good paper. Prepare to be heavily critiqued.

11-13-2010, 04:29 PM	#7
sewerman V.I.P. Member Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: hurricane ally florida Posts: 231	Re: 2nd amendment paper is finished very good job sewerman