Tranters 1st attempt at a US halloween story.

Discussion in 'General Discussion' started by TranterUK, Oct 31, 2008.

  1. TranterUK

    TranterUK Guest

    Dont expect too much....

    This is the story of a cop who hated his wife. Married life had started well, but over the years they just could not stop fighting. He had asked many times for a divorce, but she wouldn't have it. Life for the Cop just got worse and worse.

    Late one night while on the way home the cop stopped some drug dealers in the street. He suggested life may get a little better for them if they did him a favour. He asked them to murder his wife! And they agreed.

    The cop decided it would be helpful if the murder happened at night, while he was on the 'graveyard shift'. Having set things up with his dealer friends, he went out to work, leaving his wife at home, alone.

    It was about 11pm when the gangsters turned up. The cops wife didn't stand a chance. They were quick and they were bloody. The neighbours heard the screem's and called 911, but by the time help arrived, it was all over.

    Early the next morning the wife's body arrived in the morgue. The staff couldn't believe the odds, because already there, laying on a table was her cop husband. He had been killed the same night by a drug dealer, new to the patch. The odd thing was that when the cop had drawn his gun, it had been unloaded.

    A mystery made all the more odd by the twelve 9mm cartridges found in his dead wife's pocket. :eek:

    End
    So what do you want for 10 mins and a gun theme! :)
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  2. We want high drama, pathos, tragedy . . . more blood and gore! :D;):p
  3. Shellback

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    I kinda like it Tranter had a bit of a interesting twist to it:eek:
    Tim
  4. Marlin

    Marlin *TFF Admin Staff Chief Counselor*

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    Great job for a first try.

    Justice was certainly served.

    I would have to rule it a double murder inasmuch as the cop's demise was caused proximately by the purposeful emptying of his ammunition from his weapon.....

    Great twist !!!!!
  5. TranterUK

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    Thanks, it really was done in ten minutes.

    I wanted to make it so that the drug dealer who shot the cop had been hired by the wife, but I ran out of time. I am behind on my work, still.
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    Pretty spooky. Har de har har
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    Sound like a tale from the 'Twilight Zone"! Good story! When will the movie be out?
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    Good job! Flesh it out a little and you could make a movie from it. ;)
  10. TranterUK

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    Thank you very much, and on the off chance anyone with the right contacts are reading this, I am available. Now. :)
  11. Tranter, you could write it up, but have both parties turn out to be transvestites, then submit it to Mad Magazine, maybe even Playboy! :D;):p
  12. TranterUK

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    Transvestites Pistol? What would it matter if they could write with both hands? Or is that ambisexual?

    Playboy you say, Hm, fortunately people who buy such publications are hardly going to be found on TFF, now are they?
  13. Transvestites are cross-dressers, Tranter. You could always stage the characters as hermaphrodites though. That should make it interesting to Playboy. ;)

    Of course not, Tranter! :eek: All of us here are "upstanding" members of the Anti-Pornography League, pure as the driven snow, and never ever look at Page 3 of the Sun, especially glocknut. We only read Playboy for its intellectual articles and the book reviews. :D;):p
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