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BARTAL
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(11/12/01 9:14:30 pm)
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My first Try
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IN THE DARK I SEE
STARS THAT COULD BE
THE SAME AS THE ONES BACK HOME

IN THE DARK I SEE
TREES THAT COULD BE
THE SAME AS THE ONES BACK HOME

IN THE DARK I SEE
PEOPLE THAT COULD BE
THE SAME AS THE ONES BACK HOME

IN THE LIGHT I SEE
THAT NOTHINGS LIKE IT SHOULD BE
NOTHING IS LIKE BACK HOME.......................
Peace....Barry

Mesen
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(11/12/01 9:37:12 pm)
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Love it Barry! I don't put much in words in my verse so folks can fill in the blanks themselves, you know color the rest of the picture in their own mind, I did that with yours. I like it. Keep it up.
Bree
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Misterstan
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(11/13/01 8:30:53 am)
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Barry,

THIS POEM I SEE
WASN'T WRITTEN BY ME
BUT I WANT TO SAY "WELCOME HOME"!

Keep up the good work....

Misterstan



nighthawk
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(11/13/01 11:48:40 am)
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ditto the above, Barry,,

keep it up,,if that's your first, you have a great future at it,,,

Stan H ,, nighthawk

GRUNT
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(11/25/01 9:36:26 pm)
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Barry

This was my first visit to the poems section and read yours first...very good, especially for a first.
'nuff said

Winter11
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(11/26/01 2:10:18 pm)
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Loved it! As Bree said, it leaves you with a sense of filling in you're own picture.

A lot comes to my mind when I read those words. I sit here and try to imagine what it must have been like to be in a strange land an not know what the next day will bring; what it must have been like to look around you and long for what you know well.

I truly can't imagine.

Great first poem... look forward to more!



Always Faithful

hope6970
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(11/26/01 11:23:28 pm)
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Barry, that was really - really good. Now why haven't you done more of that before now? - Hope
 
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